hossainc
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hector5559
Vinny
I wouldn't pay any attention to that line. Too mundane. is this your retail store? Who is 'their' I would eliminate 'their rapid'-- You are talking in the third party. if this is your retail store you would say
'we are increasing our inventory to meet the rising demand'
Just forget all the other words, don't need 'em.. When people read ads, they 'scan' not actually read, You must catch their attention within the first few 'simple' words. Really, I wouldn't even say anything about increasing inventory. people don't care about that. You advertise you have the product, not how much of the product you have.
| 11 years ago. Rating: 3 | |
Vinny, That seems like excellent advice to me. Are you a writer? Author?
I would have just said, "It's ok" and not given any thought. Congratulations.
I would have just said, "It's ok" and not given any thought. Congratulations.
Thank yo itsmee. No i am not a writer but I have been in marketing since i was young in family business and now i do marketing in the company I work for in radio/www/tv and print. I like to play with words~! :)
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