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    this sentence is correct ? Due to their recent rapid sales growth,retail stores are increasing their stock of popular items.

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    Our stock rooms are full of rubbish,that is hard to sell,

    itsmee

    hector, my man ... You are no doubt correct but I think they wanted to keep this quiet, yannno?

    I wouldn't pay any attention to that line. Too mundane.   is this your retail store? Who is 'their' I would eliminate 'their rapid'-- You are talking in the third party. if this is your retail store you would say


     'we are increasing our inventory to meet the rising demand' 


    Just forget all the other words, don't need 'em.. When people read ads, they 'scan' not actually read, You must catch their attention within the first few 'simple' words.   Really, I wouldn't even say anything about increasing inventory. people don't care about that.  You advertise you have the product, not how much of the product you have.

    itsmee

    Vinny, That seems like excellent advice to me. Are you a writer? Author?
    I would have just said, "It's ok" and not given any thought. Congratulations.
    Vinny

    Thank yo itsmee. No i am not a writer but I have been in marketing since i was young in family business and now i do marketing in the company I work for in radio/www/tv and print. I like to play with words~! :)


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